Here is the concluding paragraph of George Orwell's famous essay, "Politics and the English Language." If you would like to read the entire essay from which this conclusion is taken (and check out, especially, the beginning), click .
if i divided this essay into
Intro:includes paraphrasing ,and thesis that includes my opinion
BP1: Admittedly,there r some benefits 4 money,,,,
Conclusion:conclude my opinion
is it ok?